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« Reply #15 on: October 15, 2009, 01:36:39 AM » |
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Braxy's new nickname is Hunk 'o' man.
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Jarla
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« Reply #16 on: October 17, 2009, 09:05:16 PM » |
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Would you be willing to beta Operation Escape after I'm finished with it? I'd like you (if you're up to it) to make sure I don't have any piddly mistakes (like I accidently spelled something wrong due to fast typing; if the plot is too slow or too fast in any of my chapters; if I need to take anything out pot-wise; and if my characters development is good enough.) I know that's a huge list, but...would you be willing to help me out after I'm done? (I still have four chapters and an epilouge to post.) Oh, and this is an R rated story. For excessive violence, some swearing (though it doesn't happen until chapter ten or eleven--I think. But I'm not sure. And, personally, I don't like writing swear words. Sadly, it makes the dialouge seem "more realistic.") and a sex scene in chapter 14. If you'd be willing to help me out, I'd really appriciate it. Here's a link: http://fanfiction.shurtugal.com/viewstory.php?sid=14374&warning=14 |
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We have everything: food, shelter and protection. We can do whatever we want: play games, listen to our iPods, drink, smoke, write letters or send emails; the list is endless. But, all we ever want, is freedom. -Operation Escape http://fanfiction.shurtugal.com/viewstory.php?sid=14374 |
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« Reply #17 on: October 17, 2009, 09:17:43 PM » |
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Oh, that's not too bad a list.  It's actually great to see you want some specifics critiqued on your story; I like having stuff to keep in mind, and this way I know what you're looking for to be beta-read. (And in case that didn't make it obvious enough, I'd be fine with beta'ing it after you've finished.  ) R-rated's alright with me, too, so no worries on that either. |
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"...I don't know why I go walking at night
But now I'm tired and I don't want to walk anymore
I hope it doesn't take the rest of my life
To find what it is I've been looking for
In the middle of the night
I go walking in my sleep..."
~River of Dreams, Billy Joel
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« Reply #18 on: October 18, 2009, 12:40:25 AM » |
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Great! I'll just pop on over here when my origional fiction's done, okay? Thanks for agreeing!
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We have everything: food, shelter and protection. We can do whatever we want: play games, listen to our iPods, drink, smoke, write letters or send emails; the list is endless. But, all we ever want, is freedom. -Operation Escape http://fanfiction.shurtugal.com/viewstory.php?sid=14374 |
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« Reply #19 on: October 18, 2009, 12:55:19 AM » |
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Alright. I'll do my best to get around to reading it all before you finish so I'll have an idea of what it's all about before beta-reading. |
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"...I don't know why I go walking at night
But now I'm tired and I don't want to walk anymore
I hope it doesn't take the rest of my life
To find what it is I've been looking for
In the middle of the night
I go walking in my sleep..."
~River of Dreams, Billy Joel
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« Reply #20 on: October 18, 2009, 12:57:24 AM » |
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Okie-doke. Would you be willing to review, or no?
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« Reply #21 on: October 18, 2009, 01:45:09 AM » |
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If I remember, certainly.  |
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"...I don't know why I go walking at night
But now I'm tired and I don't want to walk anymore
I hope it doesn't take the rest of my life
To find what it is I've been looking for
In the middle of the night
I go walking in my sleep..."
~River of Dreams, Billy Joel
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« Reply #22 on: October 18, 2009, 02:41:10 AM » |
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Okay. If you forget, I'll bug you. |
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We have everything: food, shelter and protection. We can do whatever we want: play games, listen to our iPods, drink, smoke, write letters or send emails; the list is endless. But, all we ever want, is freedom. -Operation Escape http://fanfiction.shurtugal.com/viewstory.php?sid=14374 |
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« Reply #23 on: October 29, 2009, 02:39:56 AM » |
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Sorry for the double post--but this is the only way I can tell you what else I'd like you to look at. (Please and thank you.) Could you check to make sure my math is correct? I'm bad at math and might have screwed the numbers up. Could you make sure I don't have any spelling/grammer errors? (I think I'm pretty good with grammer and spelling, but just in case.) Um...I'll post somethin' else if I come up with more things for you to check for. Okay? You're an awesome beta! Thanks! |
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We have everything: food, shelter and protection. We can do whatever we want: play games, listen to our iPods, drink, smoke, write letters or send emails; the list is endless. But, all we ever want, is freedom. -Operation Escape http://fanfiction.shurtugal.com/viewstory.php?sid=14374 |
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« Reply #24 on: October 29, 2009, 10:22:36 AM » |
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No problem with the double-post; it's definitely been over two days anyway since the last one. And sure I can; it'll probably wait until I get down to beta'ing it in the story (reading the chapter and making comments/suggestions throughout) since it's easier to just highlight those in red than to try and point them all out in a review. But yes, certainly I can help with that. |
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"...I don't know why I go walking at night
But now I'm tired and I don't want to walk anymore
I hope it doesn't take the rest of my life
To find what it is I've been looking for
In the middle of the night
I go walking in my sleep..."
~River of Dreams, Billy Joel
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